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 Basic Moves: Basic Moves:
  
-Attack: 7-9 shouldn't come before 10.+Attack: 7-9 shouldn't come before 10.  
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Upkeep: I maintain that "default-1" doesn't work well with the time scales we  Upkeep: I maintain that "default-1" doesn't work well with the time scales we 
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 My most reasonable reading of this is basically just "recast the spell, but it  My most reasonable reading of this is basically just "recast the spell, but it 
 doesn't consume your action for the turn." doesn't consume your action for the turn."
 +<IN: UPKEEP REMOVED. WILL REPLACE WITH RECAST IF NECESSARY.>
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 Interfere: -2 to the roll or its outcome. (What does -2 to an outcome mean? In  Interfere: -2 to the roll or its outcome. (What does -2 to an outcome mean? In 
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 Replace all " +" and "+ " with "+" a couple times if you concur! Replace all " +" and "+ " with "+" a couple times if you concur!
 +<IN: TODO: SOME ENTRIES FIXED BUT NOT ALL>
  
 Lust is a linked word on the last couple things, but not elsewhere. Do you want  Lust is a linked word on the last couple things, but not elsewhere. Do you want 
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 6- rolls may include a GM penalty unless otherwise explicitly stated.  6- rolls may include a GM penalty unless otherwise explicitly stated.
 (GM is not obligated to make a hard move, although they are certainly able to.) (GM is not obligated to make a hard move, although they are certainly able to.)
- +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Basic Moves: Basic Moves:
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 "Either" is different language than PbtA usually uses, and than we use  "Either" is different language than PbtA usually uses, and than we use 
 elsewhere. "Choose one:" is more typical. elsewhere. "Choose one:" is more typical.
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Volley: Volley:
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 Volley's equivalence to Attack in moves makes me nervous as a systems analyst,  Volley's equivalence to Attack in moves makes me nervous as a systems analyst, 
 but I'll have to revisit this later with specific concerns. but I'll have to revisit this later with specific concerns.
 +<IN: FUNCTIONS AS INTENDED :D>
  
 Block: Block:
 Third option: +1 to their next roll should probably be +1 Forward Third option: +1 to their next roll should probably be +1 Forward
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Defy Danger: Defy Danger:
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 Defy Danger can be used when you want to do something that's not covered by  Defy Danger can be used when you want to do something that's not covered by 
 another move, such as pull a lever, or trip an enemy. another move, such as pull a lever, or trip an enemy.
- +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Basic Magic: Basic Magic:
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 Cast: Cast:
 "enscolled" should be "enscrolled", I think? "enscolled" should be "enscrolled", I think?
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Enscrollment: Enscrollment:
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 Creation Spells: Roll + Charm. Creation Spells: Roll + Charm.
 Destruction/Natural Spells: Roll + Wits. Destruction/Natural Spells: Roll + Wits.
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 "uses this turn" is kind of vague. "spell is cast this turn" is better. "Spell  "uses this turn" is kind of vague. "spell is cast this turn" is better. "Spell 
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 Unless I've misinterpreted this and what that means is "your entire turn is  Unless I've misinterpreted this and what that means is "your entire turn is 
 spent enscrolling." spent enscrolling."
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Two combat turns or five minutes feels WILDLY disparate. Two combat turns or five minutes feels WILDLY disparate.
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 "No roll is required" is written right under the outcome of your roll.  "No roll is required" is written right under the outcome of your roll. 
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 weapon rather than using it? And if so, why is it included in the description  weapon rather than using it? And if so, why is it included in the description 
 of cast? of cast?
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 Upkeep: Upkeep:
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 time. There isn't a ton of space between "this lasts one move" and "this lasts  time. There isn't a ton of space between "this lasts one move" and "this lasts 
 all combat," because turns are problematic concepts. all combat," because turns are problematic concepts.
 +<IN: FIXED - UPKEEP REMOVED>
  
  
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 is dramatic, but feels kind of... eh. Not articulate at this hour, but it feels  is dramatic, but feels kind of... eh. Not articulate at this hour, but it feels 
 like a thing I would abstract away. like a thing I would abstract away.
 +<IN: FIXED?>
  
 Discern Realities: Discern Realities:
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 but it's often used in very non-social situations by players. I might just move  but it's often used in very non-social situations by players. I might just move 
 this up to Basic Moves. this up to Basic Moves.
 +<FIXED: MOVED TO INTERJECTIONS>
 +
  
 Hustle and Bustle: Hustle and Bustle:
 "You will need to wait or travel" - if it has an "or", it's probably two things. "You will need to wait or travel" - if it has an "or", it's probably two things.
 +<IN: EXPLICIT BINARY OR>
 +
 "You will draw unwanted attention or let others know." - Although this one  "You will draw unwanted attention or let others know." - Although this one 
 seems pretty much fine, since those are the same consequence said differently. seems pretty much fine, since those are the same consequence said differently.
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Interfere: Interfere:
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 reason not to is because you're afraid of having persuasive players talk their  reason not to is because you're afraid of having persuasive players talk their 
 way out of every situation, which is what they're for. way out of every situation, which is what they're for.
 +<IN: FIXED: CHANGED LANGUAGE>
  
 Parley: Parley:
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 moves, and if there's a distinct difference between them, clarifying it may be  moves, and if there's a distinct difference between them, clarifying it may be 
 worthwhile. worthwhile.
 +<IN: FIXED: DISAMBIGUATED USE CASES>
  
  
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 things is a crime, it's inconsistent phrasing. We refer to them as attacks  things is a crime, it's inconsistent phrasing. We refer to them as attacks 
 elsewhere. elsewhere.
 +<IN: FIXED-ISH>
  
 Give It: Give It:
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 (If you have three choices and two of them are "remove a debility," you don't  (If you have three choices and two of them are "remove a debility," you don't 
 actually have three choices.) actually have three choices.)
 +<IN: FIXED>
  
 Tease: Tease:
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 someone you don't intend to. >D I guess that's a 6- oh well you're at the end  someone you don't intend to. >D I guess that's a 6- oh well you're at the end 
 of the document you just have to read all these words now bla bla bla. of the document you just have to read all these words now bla bla bla.
 +<IN: FIXED: IMPLEMENTED ACCIDENTAL TARGETING>
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